A day at the beach

 Malo e lelei readers welcome back to my blog!

This term we have been learning to write narrative stories. The purpose of a narrative is to entertain the reader
First we had to make a narrative writing template
Then we had to put all the planning into a story
We had to include setting,charters,build up events,story,narrative,ending,problem and a resolution
One of my favourite sentences is when I checked my wallet and I had thirty dollars
One thing I could improve on is my story because it needs to be more entertaining. Here is my narrative writing.

A Day At The Beach

One day as I strolled down the street at 12:00, I recognized a girl standing by a

telephone. She was calling for someone to go swimming and also she was trying

to find a friend. 

The following morning, a mermaid was waiting at the beach with a bright, blue,

clear sky. She glimpsed at me, then the mermaid whispered “hello.” I jumped and

mumbled “hello.” I didn't know what else to say so then she smiled at me and then

I smiled back. Then she asked, “Do you want to go swimming with me?”

I yelled “Yeah sure!” then the mermaid sang out “Let's go then. Come on in!”

'“I’ve gotta go home and get my togs then I'll be right back.” I called as I was

quickly rushed to my house.

When I got back to the beach, she yelled as I came back “Are u coming in?”

“Umm, umm, I can't,” I moaned sadly as I rushed towards her. She cried,

“Why can’t you come in? Please. Please.” “No! I don’t have any swimming togs.”

When I walked away. 

Two hours later when I was at home, I thought of an idea to make this better.

I went into my room and checked my wallet. I had $30. I had just enough for a pair

of swimming togs so I ran to the supermarket. I rushed in the store and I strolled

through looking for a pair of colorful togs. “Ah ha! I found them. Yay, yay, yay!”

I got them then I ran all the way back to the beach. When I got there, she was gone.

I shouted “I’m back!” and I could feel the dry warm sand on my feet. 

“I rushed and bought some togs so that we could go swimming now.”

I yelled so she came up and she mentioned “you really did” so we went swimming

then we went to get ice cream. It was delicious. We strolled back and we were

playing tag and running in the water. It was SO fun! I felt like I was in a dream.

We are friends for life. That was the end of that amazing story.

                                           The end!

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